Lovely simile, creating powerful imagery which probed my mind.

Well done.

Michael

Chloe,

Welcome to the site. An excellent first post here full of wonderful, quick-fire descriptive writing.

Well done and keep it up,

Ben

Just wow... Remember liars always get caught out ;)

Lovely write, full of imagery and emotion. Only word of advice is to use punctuation. But other than that, You did a wonderful job.

- Joe