Kurt,

How lovely to see a really well written rhyming poem on here.
As you know from reading my piece, I am a fan of this type of poetry. This has everything - a story, rhythm, rhyme and it kept me enthralled until the very end. Quite a chilling little piece that I enjoyed thoroughly.

All the very best,

Ben

Oh as Ben said this is indeed quite chilling...your rhyming is great and it flowed really well. I find it hauntingly elegant. A really wonderful piece.