by Mr. Darcy
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            Kasie, this is super, I mean it! The beat is spot on; not iambic in places, but that's a mere technicality.   | 
by Kasie
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 Thank you. I will defiantly work on that. Like I stated in the pm the hainting face was unintentional, it just appeared when I centered it before posting.  | 
by Em
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            Kasie, you're getting really good at these I think anyway as I'm not sure on iambic pentameter bit the da Dum da Dum seems to be spot on. This is relatable for me as I have suffered the hands of someone I thought loved me. To break it up I have separated the lines into 4 lines then the couplet.   | 
by Kasie
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 Thank you, I tried to write this as if they were recurring dreams. I still have a little trouble with iambic words, but I feel that I'm slowly getting the hang of it.  | 
by Brenda
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 Kasie, another wonderful sonnet! You really have taken a shine to these. One typo, "To strong" should be "Too"- other than that, the subject matter was raw and I felt your fear and pain-  | 
by Kasie
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 Thank you. I have corrected the typo, once again thank you for pointing it out.  | 
by Naughtymouse
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            This is an awesome sonnet, really well written and as Maple Tree would say is a "spit and post" type of write. As its been broken down already I won't but Kudos on this write!  | 
by Kasie
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 Thank you  | 
by mossgirl19
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 I love sonnets and I am just jealous of how you guys do this. :-) this is fantastic  | 
by Kasie
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 Thank you, it's not as hard as it looks, believe it or not. The hardest part for me was trying to determine whether a syllable was soft or not. ( If that makes since)  |