So firstly, I'd like to welcome you to our lovely little poetic home. And secondly, the energy in this piece is the only thing that kept me interested til the end. I can see a lot of potential in your work, but your style was bland and your lengthy lines were a bit confusing. Your descriptions were hit and miss, but I found your use of colors inviting and your plush words like "lavish" and "luxury" really got your mood across to me.

Interestingly penned, but you still have a long way to go before making a name for yourself here.