I had a sense of de-ja-vu when reading this. I commented on a poem written by Ben aka - Naughtymouse. Although this is different, it holds the same essence for me: the cosmos and the effects of gravity and stars.

I like this, but with your new metric knowledge I wonder if you could tweak the words to make the words sing?

Very good, Kasie. A lovely poem.
I have to be honest, though, for me it's not all about metre. Recently, I've actively tried to write some poems that follow no syllable count or metre just so that I'm not tied down by that all the time. I've read a lot of older rhyming poems recently and they don't all adhere to meter/syllable count. I do agree with Michael in that with meter the words can 'sing' but it can lock you up a bit.

Take care