I would love to read more!
Describe the feeling that needs to be freed... and maybe try to use less "I"s

Such a sad write but beautiful in your wording. It's so hard when people don't accept you as who you are. You feel the need to change to be more accepted, which is indeed sad. The one thing we can't do is lose who we really are. Be strong, have faith, things will get better-hugs-

This is a touching piece. I really empathize with this.
-I can't magically improve my personality
Wow. I think this is a very powerful line. It shows a desire to change, but also an inability. It shows that you know that change takes time.
-They might see a soft spoken person
This line shows that what they see isn't always the truth. They see a quiet person, but you have a battle being waged inside you.
Amazing piece!

This is a touching piece. I really empathize with this.
-I can't magically improve my personality
Wow. I think this is a very powerful line. It shows a desire to change, but also an inability. It shows that you know that change takes time.
-They might see a soft spoken person
This line shows that what they see isn't always the truth. They see a quiet person, but you have a battle being waged inside you.
Amazing piece!