Comments : Mending The Tide

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Chris, this is truly well done and raw. I feel this is happening right now and the way you wrote it, it's like I'm in the scene which makes for a fantastic piece and gripped me throughout. Fabulous rhymes too.

    1/ This is a raw, honest opening and to me it's like you feel your mistakes made them hurt you which is what depression/addiction does to us.

    2/ This tore at my heartstrings.

    3/ The rhyming here is fantastic, that's all I have here.

    4/ When trust is lacking unfortunately relationships? break up because if we can't trust the person we love then who can we trust? More great rhyming.

    5/ I like this because it shows your willing to stick around to make things worse.. I must say though the last line was a little off putting and here is a suggestion: 'and only then we will last'

    6/ Very uplifting :)

    7/ I truly hope it works out for you.

    Em x

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Absolutely love this piece. Raw and honest and just simply beautiful.