Comments : I saw you the other day

  • 6 years ago

    by hiraeth

    The title is a reference to "I Saw Daddy Today" by Yann Tiersen, isn't it?

    I'm going to dissect (well more like poke with a stick) a couple of stanzas because they are beautiful:

    "over the maudlin lullabies of humming
    bird fingers on milky keys"

    beautiful imagery, which is also why I thought of yann tiersen's piece played a role in this poem, whether it inspired the title or the poem itself. I keep saying these words over and over again in awe, I'm envious I didn't write it first.

    "indecisive whether to blame
    our own drunkenness to empty bottles or
    perhaps to fluttering hearts."

    I think this very well might be the crux of the poem, and it's packaged in such a dense emotion-filled stanza.

    "Imagine being something other than lonely."

    What a haunting line to end this poem on, you've perfectly summed up your entire piece beautifully!

    • 6 years ago

      by Sai

      I wish it were. I haven't heard that piece yet, but I'll look it up. Thanks so much :)