Michael! Such a brilliant tale of the journey from depression to acceptance (I think?).
The inner fight with your depression depicted as a bloody battle from which you have come out the proud winner. The pride in your words is clear, and so you should be! The message seems clear ... YOU did the hard work, from within yourself to get where you are now ... no religious guidance, praying or spiritual reading gets to take any credit. I love the 'ye olde english' style and the take on 'Me, Myself and I' to include the fourth dimension of your self (the depression - 'thee') - and of course, your rhyming is spot on! Fabulous! :-) x
I found myself fascinated by this poem. The story unfolds of the man facing his demons of addiction, told with a beautiful medieval-style language and flawless rhyming. Moreover, the poem makes many religious references, such as to the Lord’s Prayer, to make the point that such hard, soul-searching self-improvement and reflection was the only way to restore his faith in himself, and could not have been gained by religious exploration. The addiction has also been given the title of ‘Thee’ – which, while acknowledging that it is a part of himself, also gives it a separate identity to the rest of his ‘selves’ (me, myself and thy) which fits nicely with Freud’s classic psyche structure of the id, the ego and the superego. Excellent! :-) x
2 years ago
by Em (marmite)
Judging Comment - Me, Myself; Thy and Thee by Michael points 7 - absolutely loved the flow and unforced rhyme of this piece as it made the whole piece seem to slip off the tongue with ease especially when read aloud. My initial thought of this was about religion but when I read it a second time it seemed to scream out “I am alone for I have chosen to be and I will make my own decisions and heal myself for no religion will cure me of all the bad I have witnessed in my life” which in my eyes is very powerful.