Sorry to hear you can relate Phoenix. Thanks for your lovely comments :-) x
2 years ago
by Em (marmite)
Hey kitty I like this piece, your rhyming as ever is pretty amazing and unforced, it just flows like water from a water fountain (unless of course the fall dries up lol)
Stanza 1 - This tells me that you have little trust in relationships because you've had bad experiences, possibly? So don't want a particular person to promise you the world when you're world as previously been shattered or at least that is how it feels in this Stanza. You just want someone who understands you and always cares for you too. Don't we all? :)
Stanza 2 - The image portrayed in this is sweet yet a longing for that ‘forever’ and though you want to believe it you can't due to the past heartaches therefore your heart doing that little dance no doubt followed but butterflies.
Stanza 3 - Absolutely love the first line here it's like “BOOM” in your face because life is cruel and we never get what we want/need when it is wanted/needed. The last 2 lines seem like a long distance or secretive relationship them ‘stuck there as I am here’
Stanza 4 - This screams to me we're in a secretive relationship so it will never be long term I thought this form the ‘stealing moments gem your trapped lifes’ and ‘dreaming the impossible’