I like this! I don't know why its simplicity made it even more complex in a way. Love the descending-like shape of the poem.
Very well done!

You are stronger than you think. Sad but well written poem. Take care x

I like this, especially the form. There are a few similar forms, but `I would like to see you try a Nonet. Message any of us, I am sure we would all like to help.

All the best, Michael

*From Shadowpoetry.com - Google it - A great source of poetry:

A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables, the second line eight syllables, the third line seven syllables, etc... until line nine finishes with one syllable. It can be on any subject and rhyming is optional.

line 1 - 9 syllables
line 2 - 8 syllables
line 3 - 7 syllables
line 4 - 6 syllables
line 5 - 5 syllables
line 6 - 4 syllables
line 7 - 3 syllables
line 8 - 2 syllables
line 9 - 1 syllables

Example #1:
a pirates playground

the ocean is a pirate's playground
they live their lives upon the sea
battles are fought to the death
the loot is divided
they drink to those lost
set sail again
a pirate's
life for
me

Copyright © 2003 Mark Williams

Example #2:
Midnight's Breath

It came sweetly upon midnight's breath,
that turned seasons from white to green,
and brought the pre-dawn sparrows
to chirp a merry tune...
nestled securely
on, around, and
in-between
Springtime's
warmth.

Copyright © 2005 Marie Summers