Thanks Jamie, appreciate you reading. and the nomination
2 years ago
by Em (marmite)
Darren this is immense the only thing I'd change is remove the 'as' at the beginning of the end stanza but only because that line would then be on one line not two and I have bad ocd and am being really picky I know (lol) but this doesn't take away the fact that this is really moving and somewhat relatable to many of us here as I bet not one of us can honestly say we haven't felt good enough at some point and if we can say it honestly then at some point before we die we certainly will.
Darren, this feels like someone full of self loathing due to an illness (?could be depression or something physical?) that makes him feel less worthy of his marriage because he's not as able and strong as he feels he should be. You refer to wedding vows ... "in sickness and in health" has to apply to both parties. A really well written, sad and thought provoking write :-) x