Comments : Life

  • 2 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Love, love, LOVE this Mark!
    Nominated :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 2 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    This is brilliant and nobody said life would be easy but we've gotta take the rough with the smooth and do our best with the hand we've been given

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I appreciate the rhyming in this and the way the two sides of life are made clear throughout. Excellent poem.

    Ben

  • 2 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Well written poem.

  • 2 years ago

    by Brenda

    Amen Mark! Loved this. This is so true, live, love, soak it all in, it's gone before you know it.

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    It's the state of being before you're dead.
    It's the mire in which you wallow.
    It's a sh*t sandwich, and if you've got more bread
    the less sh*t you'll have to swallow.
    ^
    this verse does not flow nearly as well as the rest. It seems you've sacrificed the meter for the inclusion of 'and if you've got more bread'. I like the metaphor, for life, but if you could convey it, without sacrificing the meter, it would make an excellent write.

    Enjoyable, nether the less.

  • 2 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Wow, Mark! You nailed it and your rhythm is great.