I like the format - the trailing words down the page meant to emphasise a point - each word of that point.
The poem sounds like the infancy of a blossoming relationship. To me, perhaps, a dating site conversation? I recall many hours liking and swiping people/ faces/ profiles. Then, eventually, exchanging numbers and sometimes good, sometimes not - the voice would sound right, wouldn't it? Then, many hours, late into the night, talking to them. The feelings of anticipation would grow, excitement - maybe this would be the one. A date is set, a time to meet, to find out if they are everything my head wants, dare I say needs, them to be?
I love the way you end this - its perfect. 'we just knew'
Thank you for your lovely comment. I love that you have seen what I'm sharing and you enjoy my poem.
Yes, this is a meeting from an online dating site, and it went exactly like this. We've now been very happily married for 11 years, so we did indeed know!
I'm very new to sharing my poetry like this and even newer to this site, so I am still appreciating the niceties and getting to understand the community. So your interest and feedback is very much appreciated Mr. Darcy
4 years ago
by Ben Pickard
What a perfectly lovely poem with an almost soothing and hypnotic melody to it.