At times my tongue was getting tangled like your laces, but this story has a worthy moral, and so it was worth it!

Nicely written, Michael. I like this form. I like it for the visual aspect, but also, in its double form, it can split a story nicely in half.

Nice work :)

Speaking of moral. Michael you did an amazing job . More need to read this. Hugs to you.

Amen Michael! Amen!

Fantastic metaphors here Michael in your superbly written form. Glad to see it's nominated :-) x
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A really interesting poem which I wanted to reread straight away! Excellent metaphors that create such an image.
Great write x