Comments : Fairy-tale

  • 7 months ago

    by Hellon

    I would love to have nominated this one but Naaz beat me to it...doesn't matter as long as it's out there for the judges to read. Can I just say however, I was quite enchanted with the whole verse and got caught up in it entirely until this line

    Life ain't no fairy-tale;

    ^^^

    ain't just didn't seem to fit with the rest of the language used in your poem so...I can only suggest you have another look at this line??

    • 7 months ago

      by Ya----Na

      Hellon, Thank you so much for the suggestion. I made some changes.

  • 7 months ago

    by Daniel

    This is a very busy poem, but in a good way. As Hellon said, a very enchanting poem! I don’t feel the last 3 lines particularly add anything interesting to the poem, as they detract from the feeling of the rest of the poem, like an afterthought. Other than that, loved it :)

    • 7 months ago

      by Ya----Na

      You are right, Daniel. I wish I could write as beautiful as you.

  • 7 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Fully deserved win. Well done!

  • 7 months ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Blimey... straight to my favourites it's like a full head of images with the simplicity of the final stranza just goes straight to the point and finishes very strongly in my opinion.

    Worth winner.

    • 7 months ago

      by Ya----Na

      Thank you so much, dear

  • 7 months ago

    by Michael

    Beautiful Sg, and many congratulations on your win, M :)