Comments : Overtaken by gloom

  • 2 years ago

    by Brenda

    Depression can feel a lot like this. I loved your descriptions. Well done-

  • 2 years ago

    by Michael

    A tough piece to read, as this resontes with myself. you have penned this well, albeit the sadness that runs through your poem. Well done and keep writing and expressing, M :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Star

    Depression is a common thing, and it shouldn’t be which is really sad...
    The devastation is felt through out the poem. And evern though it is hard, if anyone wants the spark of their eyes back don’t leave it to luck :)

  • 2 years ago

    by the color green

    i think this is a piece most of us can relate to in some point in our lives, even though i feel it shouldn't. well done. i enjoy economical writing; writing that communicates complex feelings with simple words. you did a good job on that, and the most critique i can think of is that the words should set their own pacing, not the ellipses, though it's really up to you. i would try to play with the structure and test how the words sound, see how it goes from there. thank you for giving us this write, and i hope you have a nice day!

  • 1 year ago

    by Mary

    Every person's grief is uniquely their own. Even though I have lost loved ones, I can only relate my own feelings at the time of loss. The overwhelming flood of too many emotions hitting me all at once. And over time how each feeling managed to find its respective place; until one day I smiled. It had been such a long time since I had smiled. I wasn't even sure what this strange sensation was on my face. Then I remembered... and slowly, everyday, that smile would visit my face more often. It all takes time. But oh how that time feels like an eternity. God bless you.

  • 6 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Tears can release the pain if they pull the root out too.
    I hope you feel better now.
    Take care.