I really liked this poem...enough to nominate it in fact. One thing that I stumbled on and I hope you read over it again...

and it’s

slipping

through your fingers.

And this time you

I think the second 'and' being so close to the first spoils the flow somewhat.

I always love the snappiness of your work; it's concise and hard-hitting.

All the best as ever,

Ben

This is simple in a way but read between the lines and boy, could it get complicated!!

So much said in so few words. I totally love the starting words, and the form of the poem- the spaces, breaks and everything. I enjoyed reading it!