Comments : Long Time Ago ....( my attempt at an octave )

  • 4 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I missed this and I'm soooooo sorry.
    Writing in meter can be hard, but iambic pentameter is tougher. I struggle, but find writing with these musical beats pleasing. I also find they help me write more creatively as I need to find other ways to Express my thoughts.
    Your octave is a good one. Secret love of a person can be anyone and I like to think this is a celebrity. Don't reveal, it won't be a secret! Lol
    Many of the lines flow really well and I'm sure when you read it out loud, you'll know where it's not quite right. Practice makes for improved octaves/sonnets. X

    • 4 years ago

      by (Olwin ) Lee Mcdonald

      Aww, thank you so much Mr. Darcy :) You're comment means a lot. ( and no need to be sorry! Lol)
      Yes, I like to try these forms too as find it a challenge for me also to give me a wee bit of incentive to write :) And they ARE like musical beats I find too! Which is probably why I like the iambic pentameter :)
      Glad to know I've accomplished a good job with this one...means a lot coming from yourself !

      I shall go reread .. And keep practising !
      Thank you Michael! :D

      ( and will not give away any "secrets" to the secret love! ) HA!