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I like how you described depression as being greedy, and how you connected it with the hour-glass effect. It works really well. The form fits your poem and word choice so perfectly. I really love this :)
There’s lots of clever wording here. Not an easy form to write well. The title is witty, as is describing depression as greedy.
Distracts and halts the poem a little. I think words like ‘perhaps’ and ‘maybe’ remove a lot of surety from a poem, and don’t often work.
That’s just one line though! An apt choice of form, and enjoyable read.
by Tony Grannell
Out of the greed and into the nothing in a splendid poetic portrayal of reality bitten. How you end and begin with, 'empty' is perfect. Very well done indeed.