Comments : Obsession (Sonnet)

  • 2 months ago

    by Star

    You really can write anything. I am not anywhere close to being an expert with sonnets, but this flowed well. And shouldn’t there be a rhyme scheme of some sort?
    Anyways, I really love this. Hope to see it nominated :)

    • 2 months ago

      by Daniel

      Thank you Star! There is a very very loose ABAB (half) rhyme scheme here ;) It’s the first ‘sonnet’ I’ve ever written, so I appreciate the comment :)

  • 2 months ago

    by Mark

    Love the word use and couplet! Great sonnet.

    • 2 months ago

      by Daniel

      Thanks Mark! Means a lot coming from a sonnet master!

  • 2 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I absolutely love this.

    • 2 months ago

      by Daniel

      Thank you Dagmar - hope you’re well :)

  • 1 month ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Daniel, in absolute honesty, some of the tricky iambic pentameter is off here(most is fine) but your syllable count and rhyming is excellent throughout. Half rhymes are a must in any sonnet in my opinion or things are really in danger of sounding forced, and you make use of them really well.
    Anyway, you know I'd love this.

    Take care

    • 1 month ago

      by Daniel

      Thanks for your feedback Ben :) much appreciated! I really need to attempt more.