Comments : Obsession (Sonnet)

  • 6 years ago

    by Star

    You really can write anything. I am not anywhere close to being an expert with sonnets, but this flowed well. And shouldn’t there be a rhyme scheme of some sort?
    Anyways, I really love this. Hope to see it nominated :)

    • 6 years ago

      by D.

      Thank you Star! There is a very very loose ABAB (half) rhyme scheme here ;) It’s the first ‘sonnet’ I’ve ever written, so I appreciate the comment :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Mark

    Love the word use and couplet! Great sonnet.

    • 6 years ago

      by D.

      Thanks Mark! Means a lot coming from a sonnet master!

  • 6 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I absolutely love this.

    • 6 years ago

      by D.

      Thank you Dagmar - hope you’re well :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Daniel, in absolute honesty, some of the tricky iambic pentameter is off here(most is fine) but your syllable count and rhyming is excellent throughout. Half rhymes are a must in any sonnet in my opinion or things are really in danger of sounding forced, and you make use of them really well.
    Anyway, you know I'd love this.

    Take care

    • 6 years ago

      by D.

      Thanks for your feedback Ben :) much appreciated! I really need to attempt more.