Comments : Soul searching

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Emi

    Soul searching
    I love this alliterative title. Does it mean you're searching for ones inner peace or something more? Before I go any further, this piece is a breathe of fresh air and slides of the tongue quite easily especially when read out loud.

    The imagery in the first part is so astounding that because it's vivid and I imagine this poor soul looking into a lake/river, possibly with suicidal thoughts but not really wanting to die or be 'dragged within' maybe this 'reflection' is of two people that couldn't be more different if they'd tried and one is trying to save the other but upon saving that person, doesn't want to be dragged in or maybe I couldn't be further from the truth lol

    I like the flow of the second stanza although I'm a little uncertain how to interpret this though the god part makes me feel like the police are on scene and nodding so as to say "get him/her away from there guys."

    This third stanza flows really well and makes me believe that this is about a suicide attempt just because of the last two lines of the 'waves reversing the hands to guide those very bones' which I assume are the bones that are weary and wanting to end the dreadful life they've been unfortunately dealt.

    The last stanza was my favourite though I cannot put my finger on why, it just is. As a whole the piece, as ever, flows beautifully and gave me chills.

    I wish I could nominate it but all I can do is put it in my faves for now.
    Take care xx
    Edit - glad it's nominated.

    • 3 weeks ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks Em. I dreamt the first 2 lines, then set about, a few days later, to write the rest. Do you ever wake up with an idea or words for a poem?

    • 3 weeks ago

      by Emi

      Yeah I've done this a number of times. So weird but it plays on your mind until it's finished x

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Mr D.

    dreams are the most incredible, and quite unexplained in truth. I like dreaming and analyzing them, Although some are pretty scary!
    This is a wonderful piece from you, adding your dreams to your 'daydreams' in some respect, nicely rhymed too.
    Nice one fella. M :)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Daniel

    A beautiful, otherworldly poem sir! Always love to read new work by you. Hope you're well & congrats on the win. :)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done, Michael. This is superb work.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Here..here Mr D well done fella on front page news:)

  • 1 week ago

    by MysteryMan

    Very deep and well worded

  • 1 week ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Amazing poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

    • 1 week ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you for stopping by to read.

      Take care.