• 10 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Allan,

    nice to grace a moment or two with your words here. The title, although distractingly in capitals, has nice alliteration. A last letter sounds like parting words from someone soon to part this world, or someone who realises that their time is short, too short perhaps?

    If our time is short it is important that we make the most of it, having a mission that one can believe in is admirable and, dare I say, inspiring. I like how you incorporate rhyme into your verses - this certainly helps each one read better. I personally like more compact verses. I know this means finding ways to communicate concisely, but like anything, when it is concentrated, it becomes more potent.

    We are living in a world that is changing at speed, if we stand still we will become overwhelmed with progress. If I am reading correctly, we need to open our minds and follow our role models. We can achieve if we believe, if not, we may as well be buried in the sand.

    Nice work, Allan.