Comments : Solar Eclipse II (NaPoWriMo Day 10)

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    There's something about this piece that seems to follow on from 'solar eclipse I' and I don't just mean the title but just the whole sombreity of the piece.
    I had a
    conversation
    with Luna,
    ^
    This opening is so different that it makes the whole piece for some reason it's so majestic because it like you're speaking to yourself but you're not because you're speaking to the unknown and if you believe in that sort of thing then what's wrong with that? I am an atheist but I often find myself speaking to people, that have passed previously, for help or for answers to things or signs and often I get them - it's strange in a nice way and I guess many of us do this.

    hoping we'll
    find a common
    ground.
    ^
    This made me ponder what common ground you're wanting to find as it could be anything.

    She listened,
    ^
    This did make me smile because, no matter who is listening, it's always nice to feel listened to.

    yet you still
    left me in the
    shadow.
    ^
    Again, another piece of yours that goes from 0-60 in such a short space of time and turns from happy to sombre so quickly that it's unreal but unfortunately relatable.

    Take care
    Em. X

    • 2 years ago

      by Star

      Thank you so much for the great detailed comment Em :)