Comments : Bull

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Ben, i am loving the imagery here. As i was reading the 3 rhyming lines, it felt like a beat. Could this rhythm continue a little better if you change the word 'paw' with drum? Also the alliteration would be a killer! As i write this, the 'paw' shows great control from the bull, not charging and displaying his anger. Ignore the word, drum - silly idea! lol

    • 3 years ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I think I kept up, Michael! Thank you.

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    I absolutely love this and second what Mr D said the rhyming of the daylight, half light and moonlight really give off the beat of the bulls paw/hoof or whatever they've called - excellent work as ever and glad to see this nominated.
    Hope you're having a lovely weekend.
    Em x

    • 3 years ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Em.