Comments : The Year 3251

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    This gave me the creeps! A chilling idea. All I can say is,
    " Good thing I'm not going to be there when THAT happens."
    Lol
    Just two suggestions:
    In the fourth line, perhaps change it to ' not many lakes' instead of ' not much lakes', as it might be slightly more grammatically correct, though the repetition sounds quite effective.
    Finally,

    And I am going to die here, I know, its my fate

    ^^ I think the 'its' needs an apostrophe just before the s, as it's a contraction of ' it is '.
    Apart from this, I really enjoyed the concept. Nicely done :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Jack

      Thanks you! I will fix these mistakes!