Comments : Dream

  • 2 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    I actually do this the whole time. It's one of my favourite pastimes! Usually, it's the Lake District I'm thinking about :)
    Really beautiful. I loved the lay out - for some reason it reminded me of a dandy lion seed, half blown away. Maybe it's the way it fades out into three vertical dots, which, in turn, gives it a dreamy edge. I often find that dreams just slowly fade. I think this is the perfect length, as I found symmetry in how, when you're dreaming, it never seems to last long.
    I like how the title ties in with the poem, and I loved the way you've described the wind as 'humming'. I also like the subtle rhymes of 'hear' and 'ear' in the first four lines, intentionally or not, lol
    Really lovely and very calming

    • 2 years ago

      by Star

      Great comment :)
      Thanks Keira!!

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    The title could go many ways in reality... As in like a dream that you want to become real or a reality that feels like a dream, if that makes sense.

    I absolutely love the layout of this because it looks like you'd envisage the wind would be as they twirl the dandelion seeds and the rubbish around (our town that is) its pretty neat, not sure if you meant to do that though. The piece itself though 'simple' it has some good advice and it helps a lot because I do this all the time because I'm quite a shy person and if I'm really nervous, I just close my eyes and imagine I'm with people I know or those I love or just in a cafe somewhere having coffee and cake, it generally works. Some great advice.
    Well done
    Em x

    • 2 years ago

      by Star

      That does make sense! I think I’m the opposite of a shy person, I still do need the quiet time thinking of the people and things I love. It makes me happy, you got it and you can relate to it.
      Thank you :)