wonderful poem.. reminded me of my friend.. i never knew if he race because of money or because of the things he was going through.. i wish i have ask him.... never got the chance... anyways, thanks for sharing..

Interesting poem, a very different topic to write on. I liked it, the flow was pretty steady, but the rhyming seemed forced at first. But over all it was good. Keep writing.
Love,

Blue

Cracky! I gotta give it up to u on this one man. Nice rhyming, good concept, great finish. It's original and very well written. Great job man.
-David
p.s. what you know me?!

Things in caps are what I think should be added in/corrected.
"And the pedals ARE down from the weight of his heel"
"The racers zoom off with a screech of A tire "
"All the money he wins HELPS TO pay his bills"
"He’s at top speed and the LIGHT flashes/ lights FLASH by"
"But THEN the brakes began to rip"

Heh, I liked it Aken. Almost autobiographical. BTW have a good time in nam.

thats really great