Comments : Tea Party

  • 2 years ago

    by Michael

    Nicely penned Star :)
    A nice mystical feel, with a hint of romance over tea..?
    The only thing i would change is the first stanza
    'his shadow emerges with the orange sun' i think its the 'with' as a suggestion maybe..

    *emerging from an orange sun, comes his shadow* anyway i enjoyed this
    M :)

    • 2 years ago

      by Star

      Thank you so much Michael, I can see what you mean :)