Absolutely amazing. It was very nicely written. One good suggestion I can give is try not to put the words so packed together. Spread them out to make the poem look more lengthy. Take care.

thanks you guys, If you look at some of my earlier stuff its more spaced out and versed. So maybe you'll like that better ~ never the less you, are both extremely gifted poets and i'm thrilled that you enjoyed my work ~ come again
rose oxo

Wow...this was superb! I truly loved the way you described the flame!! Awesome!!!