I really liked how long the lines were. It seems to me that that way your rhyme scheme didn't seem fake at all, since there were so many words in between the rhyming words. That kicked butt. The one part that I sorta didn't get was
"But him inside my car with me, had panged my heart to break" because I wasn't sure what panged my heart to break was all about. lol, probably some poetic license eh? Well that's fine. My favorite part was the existence / no existence trade, that was witty.

Thank you kristina, Lucifer, and stormy. Your comments mean a lot ;)

Thank you sean:).

Noone ever gets that part you mentioned. My dad died before he got a chance to see me get my first car, and like right before he passed that was "big event" we were waiting for (father-son moment). When I finally got my first car, I pictured him next to me and I honestly believe he was there with me.

Even though it confuses everyone outside of family:p, I wont to leave that line in there...it's for him:) The whole poem was kinda for him anyway.
Thanx again for the comment dude..you rock!!!

Oh wow... this is amazing...

It really touched my heart...

It flowed so smoothly and easily and I was surprised how long it really was when I scrolled back...

I changed the line everyone seemed to get confused about. I'll keep the original version for myself.

Thanx for the honest critique ;)

Thats loooong.but i like it you write very good poetry