Ehh ok I'm gonna try and be a little bit intelligent now. Hmm normally poems have commas in broken sentences that are continued below. This doesn’t, but maybe that’s just how you want it. Other wise I don’t really seem to find anything wrong with this, normally I myself do not like love poems, but that’s just who I am. Well I guess that’s all I need to say.

I don't really understand what you mean... broken sentences that should be read like they aren't don't need commas, but some of the sentences do have commas in this poem... Oh nevermind lol.

Its coollll-thats all i wanna say!

it's nice =) i liked it... nvm about the commas =) i liked ur poem wif or wif out em :P.... anywayz hope u pass by mine =) much love

That was beautiful.

*Chokes*
Another great piece by Sean Allen himself. Your poem made my heart hurt which means you did good. I've looked up and down, left and right, but i can't find anything to critique on. Sorry Sean, wish i could be more helpful

As says Aken Sol, very well done. Made me kinda think about Spain again...you kno what i mean =)