Great Poem! It was very beautiful! Great job and keep up the good work!

This poem was pretty good, I liked the conceptual idea, but I thought the rhythm was a bit weak. I would tweak the number of syllables per line in some of the longer ones so that you could get a more uniform rhythm, definitely liked the idea though.

I thought this poem was different. KInda reminded me of teh firefly at first. Good job writing this but i would also have to agree with sean allen on his comment.

Thanks a lot everyone. I will try to work on the rythm like you all said. :)

WOW! this is awesome! I really do like the reversal of thought you utilize in this. VERY well done!

One thing wrong, I think... Isn't the panda's mask black (ebony) not white (ivory)? You can easily switch the two words since they have the same syllables.

Wonderful job here. I enjoyed reading it a lot... keep up the good work! =) Take Care!

~Grace

No actually (at least the way I was thinking of it). There face is mostly white with the black around their eyes, nose and on their ears, giving the illusion that they're wearing a white mask (at least to me). Their bodies seem to be more white than black though so maybe I'll have to reword a little to try and clear things up there...

ok, I get what you are saying about the mask... the mask I was seeing is a little one like the lone ranger wears... LOL :o) great poem, Still!!!