Wow..
amazing work Robert!
truly touched me
keep it up!:)
-Lisa

Ohhh this is BEAUTIFUL.

I found this to be adorably sweet and touching, and the emotion and depth in this were lovely.

Beautiful ending, you managed to say so much in a relatively short piece.

I could just feel the love you were expressing here. The imagery was beautiful, I could just picture everything clearly. One thing that stood out to me was the last line. It didnt make sense. It seems as its too wordy and you can revise it to make it flow better. Well done.