Comments : When

  • 19 years ago

    by Keith

    Exelent Job!

  • 19 years ago

    by Keith

    Sorry! It wouldnt load right so i kept clickin OMG IM SRY I FLOODED THE POST!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by My Name Is Mouse

    Good poem. But there are some stanza's I had trouble reading through. I'll insert some words, etc, tell me what you think of them.

    "I don't QUITE understand,
    why you have chosen me.
    Why some one as perfect as you,
    would chose the imperfect me.

    Whenever your faraway,
    I feel like my heart is missing.
    whenever your away,
    all I can think is, the day i will be with you.

    >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

    With the words, commas, fullstops that I added, I found those two stanzas much easier to read.

    Well done, anyway.

    - Mouse.