Here's what I have to say, no one can tell you how to make something better when its already great! Not every poem rhymes all the way through, and more importantly, when there's a message to be said,you say how it needs to be said. Wonderful job, only wish more people could read that that NEED to read it!! I gave it a 5!! Bravo!!

Sarah

This is great. i'm totally anti- smoking. its just such a horrible habbit. so anyways yeah i think its great. i would actually put it in life/society in about society. i think smoking is a big issue in society. xmollyxx

Nice poem b'coz u tried to create some awareness among the people reagarding the affect of addiction...

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Don't listen to anyone who gives rude comments *cough*

This poem was very good and I loved the whole meaning behind it. You have a God-given talent and don't let anybody look down on you for your work, because it's truly awesome! =) Take care, as always, and keep writing!

~Grace

That's a good way to make ppl stop smoking. I'm trying to get my brother 2 quit. It's a really bad and expensive habit. Good topic for a poem, good message and awesome write;)

Unfortuneately, I am a smoker, but my lung feels terrific!!..lol..sorry, I always tell ppl that!! Love ya, Tim