Comments : No Time To Love

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    I like how the lines get progressively shorter towards the end, great use of utilizing the format of the poem in a symbolic gesture. Work on the punctuation though, the flow is a bit confusing in some places due to misplaced commas and such. ex.:
    "I’ve been different and never the same,
    As the people that make the norm"
    that first comma shouldn't be there, and there should be a period after norm. Look out for mistakes like that. Good poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by Ali

    Aken darling... I liked this one alot... like mr. Allen said the idea of the lines getting smaller is a good one... it works really well.

  • 19 years ago

    by DMG

    nice kracky