Tarrence the poem was ok but it seemed abit more of a victems stand point then any rather submissive. If you played a stronger role in the piece you may find alot more emotion you can evoke out of it but good read anyway take a look at my work if you have the time

first off, welcome to the site! i'm from nj too! well, i liked this poem very much. it's about you and how you feel about yourself. i kinda agree with robert but i liked how you worded it and how you ended the poem. keep it up. take care:)