I believe true poetry is not in the wording or scheme, but in the emotion behind it. That being said, a poem written from the heart will always be a masterpiece. Thanks for sharing.

this isnt bad...it really isnt...in fact..i liked it..good work...keep it up!

no this is not bad at all, not the best youve written, but you can tell its full of feeling
"You see right through me
But you pierce me with your stare
As if I'm some evil thing
Of which you should beware"
i like it