Mmmm... I like it :) I think it would work great as lyrics for a song, are you going to add music to it sometime?? Make sure you post the music on the net when you're finished with it ;) okay?? :)

Short,cute and beautiful poem...Keep writing...and thanx for ur comment on my poem...it meant a lot to me...Take care....FIVE>>>

lol thanx Allen, Valeria and Kumar 4 commenting, u dnt kno how much ths means to me because even thouigh its small it could be the beginning of my career! Thank you so incrredibly much!! Hey we've all got to start somewhere right? Thankz Thankz hugs and kisses for you all!

Hi
Thanks for leaving a comment.
This poem is sweet. I like It.
If you are trying to write songs/lyrics.
Check out some of the format of my Lyrics. I feel that all of my writings are Lyrics and I just don't repeat the chorus when I put them on this site.

P.S. I don't know If Going out is for any perticular person but good marie guess. She does fit the mold. And she is a poser.
PSS By the way Who are You and how do you know me.