Okay, so I love the form of the poem. The repitition of the day by day, along with the complex rhyme scheme that spans the different stanzas is great. However, my criticism lies in the last line. I don't think it makes very much sense, and the rhyme seems forced. Face et. all also rhymes with : lace, mace, ace, bass, brace, chase. grace, space, trace, vase, embrace, disgrace, erase, replace, and much much more. Mebbe you can give one of those a whirl eh?

Man, this is some good reading. The repitition of the second line is totally unique for me. No BS, the repitition of the second line is totally uniquer to me. No BS. Keep em coming, cuz you got a long way before you catch up to us.
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Good poem, flowed together well. I liked the repetition in the stanzas. Great work

yeah it had nice rhythem and the repitition added alotof effect! it was short and too the point! great job! p.s u r very hot!

great form with the poem. it had nice rhythm and i usually don't like repetative poems but this was really really good. keep up the great work.