wow i love it! you successfully managed rhyme and flow... not too shabby

he he

inna

ths is a kool poem, its really catchy. nice rhythem to it...thanx 4 commentin on mine...WHO YOU CALLING A KID!!! *sob* im a big girl now... ok ill shuddaup now

ths is a kool poem, its really catchy. nice rhythem to it...thanx 4 commentin on mine...WHO YOU CALLING A KID!!! *sob* im a big girl now... ok ill shuddaup now

I like it. It has it's own style of flowing koo.

Fantastic. Enjoyful. Inspiring. Delectible.

that was a crazy poem i liked how it flowed .... intresting title

Not bad. Not bad at all.

Oh my word, lol
I loved it, your flow was great i never stumbled and your writing is a unique style that is awsome....
take care 5/5
scooby

WoW, Soo interesting, really awesome writting, I luv it..Keep it up! 5outta5 for sure
Shannon

Different, very freely written. Seems definetely like thoughts on paper... heh.. well soon I am gunna run out of your poems to comment on, though they all are very good. Keep writing - you should always know that I will keep reading!

I like how you brought back part of the begining in the last stanza. "In the light
I stand alone,
My skin pressed tightly to the bone," sounded really cool too! great job! I like how it flows well even though the rhyming doesnt follow through the whole poem.

Excellent poem!! It was filled with so much emotion! I especially liked the stanza:
My heart is gone,
There is an ache,
An empty hole,
None left to take

This was such a great poem! I absolutely loved it! 5/5***