this is a really good poem! great job!

i'm not going to say this was a great poem, because it was fair. You have alot of errors you need to fix. Mostly mi, from my. The stanzas don't flow, its broken. The line soon till soon i'll hit the floor. Should just be soon i'll hit the floor. You don't need that extra soon in there. I hope you your not getting upset i'm really trying to be honest and not tell you its awesome when i don't honestly beilve it is. I always like honesty better. Thats just me. Ok now that i'm done rambling on......i'd give it a 3

jacki thank yoy so much fore being honest it means alot to me