It's a blatant world of loneliness
With crimson blood of everchanging sight
I sit here on this mound of hate
And wait for it all to ignite

wow, i can really relate to this stanza....this is another 5 and i hope to read more soon

HOw amazingly beautiful you put every sentence together!! Every word had a meaning!! This is amazing amazing work!!! I loved every bit of it!!!
great job!
luv elizabeth

"Uncharacterized figures of hunger
Tempt my watering bones of crave
"You can have it if you want it"
What they mean is "Just be brave"
Love that stance. this poem is very well put and i love the words you used and how you put them together (especially the first line in this stance, its my favorite in the whole poem) I woul like you to know that i did get what you were trying to say, and i absolutly love the last stance. awesome job, beautiful