it has a very nice flow to it even if the attempt at rhyming is a little weak its still a great poem ^.^ i give it a 4... it definatly deserves better than that 1 someone gave it!

aww thanks that means a lot!i no its not very gud i just wrote it cos i wo bord but ur comment is really appreciated thanks xx

its good, spesh like the lines

My blood still pumps
beating inside,
My heart still jumps
although it's died.
keep writin!

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