Thats fecking brilliant mon ami...i'd say more about it in terms of advice..but you are one of the few who totally don't need it.

I can't big you up anymore without being totally gay. You really love this girl eh? Some great lines about seeing her in your mind when you're blind and old...aw man.

The second stanza is absolute gold. You should make a book matey.

BOLD EFFORT.

I think he's from the isles.

Yo August.....you should know that i've put you forward for the weekly poetry contest...that might disgust you...but well theirs nothing you can do about it now.

My E-mail SI ; LeCosmic@hotmail.com

drop me a line mr Man.

And it does. And I will.

what the crap was that praise thing i just did?!?

well okay dude i tried to be nice but obviously that's not happening. . . if you don't want to read poems about suicide then why do you do it. . . hmm. . . let's see probably because you don't have a life and you have nothing better to do but say cruel things to people well let's see this poem is what the 10,000 love poem! OMG! no way. . . by the way dude this things kinda f'd up you see i try to be kind to people about their writing even when it suxs but after reading this there's nothin i can say. . .

Love. . . um. . . not, Taylor

Thanks for that Taylor! August, you're fat but hey, you're a good kid, good luck with... er... cassandra? Yeah.

Yo August, do you want those two rude comments removed?...just complain about them using the function and they'll be zapped.

o so that everyone thinks that hes some sweet guy in love with someone! hes not some fukin sweet guy kevin murray! he sure as hell isnt! his some fukin bastard that wood as soon shoot someone in the heart and throw that dman girl in his poem a big ass smooch! austin this is wut i hav e to say u insulted me ill insult u.....

....god damnit i ahte fukin lvoe poems! theres about a billion on ehre! aeveryone is jsut whining "o i cant get that girl" or "o i cant get that guy! im so depressed bc my lvoe life sux..." "y cant i have sex" get over it!!!!!!!!!!

so how do u feel now bud?

byt he way to all of u... i hav no problems with love poems!! jstu i was trying to prove a point to mr. big shot!

august ur immature and stupid... ur so nieve.... and ur getting this from a 13 year old.. o but u r nieve... take a look around august ur not the onli one ehre!!!!

~bite me~ >:0

Kids these days! My goodness, that comment zapping feature looks advertising now. The sad thing is no one really looks at what you have to say when you misspell like that. You should all check out my thread on the forums, it's getting quite some attention!

I'm glad you've kept them there... it's interesting that they have nothing to do with the poem itself, which rocks, by the way.

Bert

Why, thank you.

Alright, I'm not actually going to comment on this because I usually don't partake in love poems, (thought I did find this romantic with defined symbols and beautiful imagery)
this is just directed to everyone who has submitted those idiotic comments.

Hey you guys, if you can't take critisizm, don't submit. You can't expect everyone to enjoy your writing, did you expect nothing but praise? Also, it's pure stupidity to comment on what type of person they are or how they live when you know nothing about them. GET OVER IT and try to move on and possibly improve your work.

Wow awesome,
i wish someone felt this way aboutme
haha,
since my name is cassidy
maybe someone does :)

anywayss, very well written
keep it up :)