Agreed; beautiful wording. Very prosy in parts but not unbearably so, and some EXCELLENT lines in here.

Will she still be there when she's somewhere,
And will you find her when she's nowhere.

Very thought-provoking, well done.

Hey Sarah, your comments make me smile. Thanks, always.

I read this poem over again and tried to see it in a different light. Umm... If it's the same kind of 'light' I wrote 'architect' in, then it's very subtle.

In answer to your question, well, 'architect' is written about a girl a bit like the girl in this poem I just posted, 'Unspilt'. Actually, I'm wodering if I will soon regret posting it because it's terribly... But now I'm rambling, aren't I? lol

All the same, I'd love you to tell me what you think of it. :)

this is a beautiful piece. I'll tell you the truth, the second stance wasn't near as beautiful as the first, but the first stance was absolutly lovely.
"the song of life, the thunder"
I love the symbolism in that line, and some of your words of comparison and imagery left me with a picture fo beauty. good job