wow...very nice poem...i liked the way u ended ur poem...take care and keep smiling...FIVE>>>

I think you may just need a little detachment from the emotions that fueled this poem so that you can look at it again....i ain't saying it's bad, far from it.....i just feel that it's far too literal and blunt for such a delicate issue..........

Maybe thats exactly what you were aiming for.....