liked it... i no what your saying i feel you

The emotions you convey in this poem are much like your other ones, very well conveyed. That's one of the things i like about your type of poem writing. You're good at conveying emotions. Your structure is alittle shaky. The stanza's and rhyming consistancy is fine but you're just a little off on syllables. Not all poems need to have matching syllables but with the type of writing you're working on, i think it would help alot. excellent job.