Comments : The 'Sin'.

  • 19 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    so sad! very well written & meaningful... 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Charlotte

    Such a sad poem but really great, keep up the good work and i hope your friend is arlight

  • 19 years ago

    by Ishari

    realy great poem hope your freidns ok you r a great writer keep at it bye
    ~kathleeny~

  • 19 years ago

    by Elizabeth Ann

    A cry that reaches. I would love to save the world from this wretchedness, and now I'm reminded. Very emtional. Thanks for sharing.

  • 19 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin 2

    Excellent poem, take care and keep writing

  • 19 years ago

    by Poetically Speaking

    great poem, very sad. man... that hits home in a way...

  • 19 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    Different style to anything I've ever read. Not sure whether that's good or bad, but very detailed and made it very easy to empathise. Well done.

  • 19 years ago

    by Lydia O

    You've done an admirable job in describing a sad situation with a very meaningful poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by miss scooby

    This poem was soooooooo sad, you wrote it very well, and it had alot of emotion within it, i was almost in tears.
    deserves nothing less then a 5
    take care
    Scooby

  • 19 years ago

    by ~Bloodied&Broken

    Hey- thanks so much guys! Yeh- i hope she's alright too! I haven't seen her in like 2/3 years so thats really upsetting.

  • 19 years ago

    by Shana

    awww, thats sad! I am sorry for what happened! This is a fantastic peice of work! Very emotional, and it touches my heart! *tears* keep it up!
    -Shana

  • 19 years ago

    by pinkalias

    "She'd bring out her weapon
    Of whatever she found
    Slicing the red
    Screaming without sound"

    I really admire that stance. Your words were tragic and powerful, and I also liked the second line,"
    Cried her mother with eyes held in black"

    symbolic imagery, good job